Review: Becoming His Little One by Isabella Olivia Ellis

bhlo__17605.1363043074.300.450Becoming His Little One

by Isabella Olivia Ellis

Romance on the Go Series

Erotic BDSM

Evernight Publishing

Blurb

Romance on the Go

Carolyn is a plain divorcee living a plain life. Though her sexual experiences have all been vanilla, she is drawn to the submissive aspect of BDSM. In the multi-player online world of Other Existence, she finds an outlet for this. It is there that she meets Dave, an older Air Force lieutenant colonel, who turns out to be her dominant counterpart. After weeks of chats in which they share their deepest desires, the two meet in real life and a match made in BDSM heaven is born.

As their relationship develops, she discovers the tenderness and emotion that complements the lifestyle. There are whips and spreader bars, but also loving massages afterward. When Dave is suddenly torn away from her by his duty to his country, it is up to Carolyn to decide if the love they’ve found is worth the fight to keep it.

Be Warned: BDSM, flogging, spanking, sex toys.

Review

Sex: 3 The scenes were explicit. The phrase “Little One” for me is a big turn off. I could not get beyond this. However, there is other erotica that has been written using this phrase more than I had thought. It may not be common, but it is used. It is still disturbing for me.

Plot: 2 The plot was uncomplicated.

Overall Enjoyment: 2 I could not recommend this book because of the lack of character development and relationship development. If this could be rewritten with the same premise but with more everything, it would be a good book.

For a more in-depth look at my thoughts when I read this book read below. Some are not very nice thoughts, so if you are sensitive to profanity leave now.

I am on chapter 4 and I am irritated by the non-existent dialogue. The phrase little one seems very high on my scale of creepy. Maybe it is because I have children or maybe because it reminds me of purple prose romances, either way the phrase rubbed me wrong. The relationship between the two is non-existent. They talk for a minute over a few sessions; and then she is so in to him she will go to his home and have sex that first night. WHAT THE FUCK! Yeah, not happening in my book, only if she was that desperate maybe and I wanted to killer off. There are plenty of horror stories that start out that way. The official blurb makes it sound like that this is a match made in heaven. I don’t see it. He seems like a jerk wanting to get into her pants and she seems desperate. I keep thinking, “For the love of God woman get a Fucking life and grow a backbone!”

And another thing that annoyed me…wait before I get to far in to my tirade know this. I have seen a large number of crappy erotic romances on Amazon and other big named sites. I want to know who reads these books before they are published. Why are these books being published, even erotica has to be well written. With the sale of ebooks and print books on the decline I would assume that editors would be careful of the books they let pass. Especially if you pay that author and advance, people like Laurell K Hamilton need to not assume just because she is who she is that I am going to buy her book. Many of these new authors need to not just jump straight to publishing. Sometimes self publishing might be the way to go until you get your craft right. But I digress, this little excerpt is published on the author’s page and it’s one of the few spots in the book with actual dialogue. The gray is the original the blue is my “WTF” I have a problem with this part. And my questions and opinions are in bold and ()‘s right after it.

“Understand this, little one. When I snap my fingers, you suck my
cock. When I clap my hands, you lick my balls. Got it?” (WTF! Is she a dog now too?)
Carolyn nodded, aching to begin the tasks assigned to her, but
Dave narrowed his eyes at her.
“You’re already making mistakes. You’re too smart for that,
Carolyn. And I know this because I would never accept any less from
someone I would have as my Little One. You answer any command I
give you with ‘yes sir’. Spoken or non-spoken.” He growled.
“Yes, sir.” She replied, not missing a beat.
He smiled coldly. “That’s better.” With deliberate, yet
impatient moves,(a good Dom will always be patient and caring. He is there for you the sub is in control of the scene. This guy seems like am amateur at best.) Dave unbuttoned the fly of his jeans and pushed
them down his thighs. Then, he gave a sharp clap of his hands.(Arff! Arff!)
“Yes, sir.” Carolyn lowered herself to her knees. Working the
jeans down his thighs, she pushed them far enough down for him to
step out and kick them to the side. His cock was clearly straining
against his navy blue boxer briefs, and she leaned forward to kiss him
through the fabric. She felt him pulsate through the cotton.
Dave let out a lustful hiss, but then pushed her away by her
shoulders.(she didn’t do much of anything by this point and if I was her I would have asked him what his deal was and/or leave right then)
Confused, she looked up at him.
Smiling deviously, he said, “Wait here. Just like that. This fun
can wait for another time. I have something else in mind, and I am too
impatient after talking about it for so long.” (Make up your damn mind, Dude.)

So now I am in Chapter 8 and I have to say He, the Dom, has never used her name but has called her “Little One” 20 times (no exaggeration I counted). He did not even used it when he gave her a piece of  “just because” jewelry, that he said was special. After two meetings he is giving out gold, awesome. I think he must be compensating for something, like the lack of emotions besides lust. **as a side note, most subs have lowercase names, like john or little one, not uppercase. It is another way of showing dominance.**

Now at the end of the book I have to remark on how drastic the emotions change for the main characters. I didn’t feel there was any build up or romance at all. If this was just erotica, then you should add more sex scenes and all it good. But I as a HFN (happy for now) BDSM erotic romance with the long distance relationship as a plot, I felt it was weak and needed more relationship development. Not to mention how he treated her, it didn’t scream love everlasting to me.

 

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